Labor education is compulsory for freshman studying at Chaoyang University of Technology. Labor education is divided into three parts in a semester. Although labor education is troublesome to me, I think to it still have its meaning.
I have to wake up every morning for labor education. This make me feel very annoying, because I always go to bed very late, and because of labor education my schedule is sometimes disturbed. Although I have plenty of things which I want to complain, I consider that I’m lucky, because my jobs are often simple. In addition, my team leaders are nice to me most time.
Does labor education have any meaning? Yes, it does. I consider that keep our campus environment clean is very important. Campus belongs to every student so that we have this duty to keep our campus becoming clean. Besides, we can make friends with students from other departments by labor education. When we finish our job, we often chat until team leaders come. I’m familiar to a girl coming from Hsinchu. Her hometown is same with me. Therefore she makes me feel very kindness.
I’m very glad that labor education is close to end, because I’m going to be sophomore. Hahaaaaaaaaa!!!
Hi Alva,
回覆刪除寫得不錯
架構也很好
其他小缺點如下:
1. Labor education is necessary to freshman studying at Chaoyang University of Technology.
句型很好，但要把necessary改成compulsory
而to改for
2. Labor education is divides into three parts in a semester.
檢查 is divides有什麼問題
3.Although labor education is troublesome to me, I think labor education still having its meaning.
不用一直重覆labor education, 可以用代名詞
"still having its meaning" 為什麼have要+ing?
4. I have to wake up every morning in order to labor education.
改I have to wake up every morning for the labor education.
5. This make me feel very annoying, because I always go to bed very late, and because of labor education my schedule sometimes is disturbed.
改This makes me feel very annoyed
第二: my schedule is sometimes disturbed不是sometimes is
6. Thought I have plenty of things wanting to complain, I consider that I’m lucky, because my jobs are often simple.
改Thought拼錯
第二: plenty of things to complain不用wanting
7. In addition to, my team leaders are nice to me most time.
in addition to 加名詞
沒名詞?用In addition, my team...
8.Does labor education have any meaning? Yes, it does. I consider that keep our campus environment clear are very important.
子句裡的keep為主詞要如何變化?
clear改clean
第三、are要改單數的beV
9. Campus belongs to every student so that we have this duty to keep our campus become clear.
第一句型不錯
第二clear改clean
第三keep + O. +直接加adj.....
10. Besides, we can make friends from others department by labor education.
改 make friends with students from other departments
10
When we finish our job, we often chat until team leader comes.
team leader是可數名詞喔, 改正
11. Therefore she make me feel very kind.
什麼叫她讓你覺得很好?
這裡不是親切的意思喔
12. I’m very glad that labor education is close to end, because I’m going to be sophomore. Hahaaaaaaaaa!!!
恭禧